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 == Deconstruct ==
 === Break it down into manageable pieces ===
-Break into sub-paragraphs. Breaking a long paragraph into a shorter one exposes its logic to a skim-reader, and makes it far easier to navigate. And may expose that the tortured logic is not really necessary. For example:
+Break into sub-paragraphs. Breaking a long paragraph into a shorter one exposes its logic to a skim-reader. It becomes easier to navigate. It also will expose any ''flaws'' in that logic, and any tortured logic that is not needed. For example:
 Consider:
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 ''<small>Such subordination could significantly reduce the amount of available proceeds receivable by the Noteholders following the liquidation of the Collateral or on an enforcement of the Security.</small>''}}
-Now no-one in their right might would claim this is elegant drafting, but at least you can see its ''shape''. Notice, too, that as you break it up you start to see its flaws: its punctuation is inconsistent. They forgot to peg out ''Hedge Counterparty amounts'' and ''Vendor amounts''. And notice, too how, as a [[legal eagle]], you are drawn into it, like a moth too a lamp, parsing the elements, at the back of your mind wondering “''how can I fiddle with this to somehow make it better?''”
+Now few would claim this is elegant, but at least you can see its ''shape''. Notice, too, that you start to see its flaws: the punctuation is inconsistent. They forgot to peg out ''Hedge Counterparty amounts'' and ''Vendor amounts''. And notice, too how, as a [[legal eagle]], you are drawn into it, like a moth to a lamp, parsing the elements, at the back of your mind wondering “''how can I fiddle with this to somehow make it better?''”
 So, consider this: