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 A.J. followed up with a static-mount diff-sensor. The rookie unclipped the stabilisers and set the unit on the floor. He punched in the coordinates and it emitted a sheet of red light.
-''Okay, everyone hold still now.''
+''Okay, everyone hold still, now.''
 The diff-sensor swept for [[Semantic structure|semantic]] content. A.J. watched the display. The hourglass flipped. It flipped again. After a few moments it rendered:  ''zeroes across the board''.
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 The squad masked up ''toute de suite''.
-A.J. hammered, “What is it?”
+A.J. yammered, “What is it?”
-Boone held out a flat-palm that said “quiet ops”. He unholstered his Z10 commlink and jacked up a secure connection back to base.
+Boone held out a flat-palm that said “quiet ops”. He unholstered his Z10 commlink and jacked up a secure connection back to control.
 “Yeah, Aggie: Do you copy?”
-A static-crackled Roger said she did.
+A static-crackled ''Roger'' said she did.
 “We’re gonna need a wall thrown up around this unit pronto.”
-“On it, Boone. Have your unit affirm confidentiality. OneNDA Protocol. You all okay?”
+“On it, Boone. Have your unit affirm confidentiality. [[OneNDA]] Protocol. You all okay?”
-“OneNDA terms affirmed. Yeah, s fine. Precautionary measure only at this time, Aggie. Di-Alpha head gabbling. Most likely stale or public side but some risk of MNPI infection. Better be safe than sorry.”
+“OneNDA terms affirmed. Yeah, s fine. Precautionary measure only at this time, Aggie. Di-Alpha-head gabbling with a draft [[Offering circular|OM]]. Most likely stale or public-side but some risk of [[MNPI]] infection.”
-Aggie said, “Oopsie.”
+Aggie said, “[[Unpublished price-sensitive information|Oopsie]].”
-Boone yukked. The squad yukked. “that's solid A grade material, Agster. I love your work.”
+Boone yukked. The squad yukked.
-AJ nudged the squid kid with his boot. All the signs. Tell-tale blue/red track-change marks running up his arm. Tossed-out [[rider]]s and [[mark-up]] littered the splintered cubicle. A half-done [[CBT]] module cycled lazily on the display.
+“That's solid A grade material, Agster. Love your work.”
-Squid kid hacked out a wet splutter, shook his head and staggered up. Chalk motes lifted off his suit.
+[[A.J.]] nudged the squid kid with his boot. All the signs. Tell-tale blue/red track-change marks running up his arm. Tossed-out [[rider]]s and [[mark-up]] littered the splintered cubicle. A half-done [[CBT]] module cycled lazily on his screen.
+The kid hacked out a wet splutter, shook his head and staggered up. Chalk motes lifted off his suit.
 A.J. cocked and aimed. “Hold it right there, tiger.”
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 Kid regarded [A.J.]]’s up-close muzzle and ''gurned''. “Oh, no, I’m clean, man. I’m straight. I'm Wickerman, through and through.”
-The suit ''was'' sharp: Wickliffe grade, sans doubte.
+The suit ''was'' sharp: [[Wickliffe]] grade, ''sans doubte''.
-“I’m a ninja. ''Look''.”
+“Relax: I’m a [[Red herring ninja|ninja]], too. ''Look''.”
-Kid tossed a deck on the floor. It spun. It landed face down. A.J. checked the back.
+Kid tossed a deck on the floor. It spun. It landed face down. A.J. checked the back. The draft was annotated in tight black cursive.
 “Football Team checks out, sir.”
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 “London. Acting by and on behalf of, not through through. Punctuation correct.”
-“I ''told'' you, man. I’m on the level.” The kid shifted awkwardly and grope at a nearby keyboard.
+“I ''told'' you, man. I’m on the level.” The kid shifted awkwardly and groped at a nearby keyboard.
-“Freeze!”
+Punchface freaked. “Freeze!”
 “Chill, man. I'm late on [[CBT]]. If I don’t finish on time they will know something’s wrong.”
-“who will?”
+Boone said, “Stand down, Roly.” He looked at the kid. “''Who'' will?”
-“Wickliffe Compliance goons. They monitor by the keystroke.”
+“Wickliffe Compliance goons. They monitor by the keystroke. I’m on their shit-list already. I missed the [[occupational safety and health|OSH]] module.”
 Boone did not want a Wickliffe compliance detail sweeping the building right now.
-Gimme a look at that.
+“Gimme a look at that.”
-Kid twisted the screen up to Boone’s eyeline. An old CRT Wang terminal swan into view. A smorgasbord of  CUI courier orange.
+Kid twisted the screen up to Boone’s eyeline. It was an Wang terminal fitted with a diffuser. A smorgasbord of [[character user interface|CUI]] courier orange swam into view.
-What's that?
-He alt-tabbed for Leisure Suit Larry. No dice: the kid’s story checked out. He scanned the screen. A timer counted down. Four minutes and counting.
+Boone alt-tabbed for Leisure Suit Larry. No dice. The kid’s story checked out. He tabbed back and scanned the screen. A corner-mounted timer counted down. Four minutes and counting.
-What's that?
+“What's that?”
-That's the goddamn deadline. I've been pulling all nighters on this goddam CDO . I gotta get this done or my ass I'd toast.
+That's the goddamn deadline counter. These dudes are serious. I’ve been pulling all nighters on this goddam [[CDO]] so I’m late again. I gotta get this done or my ass I'd toast.
 “Okay. It’s D.”