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if you take your legal contracts seriously as a piece of code — not every lawyer does, and for some contracts there are reasons not to[1] — then treat it like code, and number and nest every new proposition as if it were a subroutine in a programme.

Number every paragraph

Lawyers have a tendency to leave some paragraphs out of numbering schema. If a clause only has one subparagraph, or, if you have split into choices, where the paragraph rejoins there seems to be no option but to leave it without a number.

Consistent numbering

It should hardly need being said, but settle on a numbering schema and stick with it. The IETA Master Agreement, in many other respects a model of drafting probity, loses its nerve around clause 6 and veers into a different numbering schema for a clause.

“Nested” statements

Legal drafting is a form is code. It should have a nested structure, as does computer code. Numbering levels— each indented to be nested inside the level above — instantly reveal the of the agreement’s exoskeleton.

Sub-levels break up the inevitably contorted syntax of commercial drafting, making the semantic content much, much easier to parse and understand. They also quickly reveal the manifold redundancies, illogicalities and non-sequiturs that stud all complex contracts.

If you are diligent in nesting your paragraphs, it will quickly highlight where you have overlawyered things. If the logical structure needs seven or more numbering levels, in all likelihood you've over-engineered it. The answer is not to reduce the number of paragraph levels and therefore bury that detail, but to simplify the logical structure so it doesn't need so many levels in the first place.

Use as many numbering levels as you need to fully reveal, and label, the logical structure of your document, bearing in mind that too many levels reveal prolixity and convolution in your drafting. Make sure your semantic structure is tight.

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A party (1) is dissolved (other than by merger); (2) becomes insolvent, unable to pay its debts, or admits it in writing; (3) makes a composition with its creditors; (4) suffers insolvency proceedings instituted by: (A) a regulator; or (B) anyone other than a regulator, and (I) it results in a winding up order; or (II) those proceedings are not discharged within 15 days; (5) resolves to wind itself up (other than by merger); (6) has an administrator, provisional liquidator, or similar appointed for it or for substantially all its assets; (7) has a secured party take possession of, or a legal process is enforced against, substantially all its assets for at 15 days without a court dismissing it; (8) suffers any event which, under the laws of any jurisdiction, has the same effect as any of the above events; or (9) takes any action towards any of the above events.

Bankruptcy. A party:
(1) Dissolved: is dissolved (other than by merger);
(2) Insolvent: becomes insolvent, unable to pay its debts, or admits it in writing;
(3) Composition: makes a composition with its creditors;
(4) Proceedings: suffers insolvency proceedings instituted by:

(A) a regulator; or
(B) anyone other than a regulator, and
(I) it results in a winding up order; or
(II) those proceedings are not discharged within 15 days;

(5) Winding Up: resolves to wind itself up (other than by merger);
(6) Administration: has an administrator, provisional liquidator, or similar appointed for it or for substantially all its assets;
(7) Security Exercised: has a secured party take possession of, or a legal process is enforced against, substantially all its assets for at 15 days without a court dismissing it;
(8) Similar events: suffers any event which, under the laws of any jurisdiction, has the same effect as any of the above events; or
(9) Takes steps: takes any action towards any of the above events.

There’s a fashion for avoiding numbers because they seem intimidating, but pish and nonsense to that. This is a piece of technical writing, not literature, and numbers in a margin don't impede reading comprehension, so there is no harm in “overusing” numbering in a technical document. There is harm in underusing, however.

Besides, Nietzsche numbered his paragraphs!


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  1. If it is a persuasive, commitment-signalling exercise like an NDA — no-one [almost no-one — Ed] expects to actually enforce the literal terms of an NDA — rather than a careful prescription of precise rights and liabilities and clear economic options, as you might find in a financing or derivative contract