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+A {{t|verb}} that illustrates the practical problem with plain English. “[[Endeavour]]” is a silly word: long, archaic, and it conjures images of Captain Spaulding, in a pith helmet, slashing through mangroves in the Congo on the hunt for Dr. Livingstone. Its alternative — to “[[try]]” — is better in every way that a plain Englishman cares about: shorter, more idiomatic, plainer, less fussy.
-A {{t|verb}} that illustrates the practical problem with plain English. “[[Endeavour]]” is a silly word: long, archaic, and its alternative — to [[try]] — is better in every way that a Plain Englishman cares about: shorter, more idiomatic, plainer, less fussy.
+But there lies the problem: “[[try]]” slices cleanly through the semantic murk that “[[endeavour]]” so skilfully stirs up. It makes clear something the [[Mediocre you|draftsman]] rather hoped to obscure: namely, that his client’s convenant is not worth the paper it is written on.
-But therein lies the problem: “[[try]]” slices cleanly through the semantic murk that “[[endeavour]]” so skilfully stirs up. It makes plain something the draftsman rather hoped to obscure: namely, that his client’s convenant is scarcely worth the paper it is written on.
 Consider these alternatives: