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*''and/or'': | *''and/or'': | ||
*''express or implied ...'': that's it: you've covered the universe of possible statements there. | *''express or implied ...'': that's it: you've covered the universe of possible statements there. | ||
*''whether orally or in writing...": so does that include, like, body language? arched eyebrows? | |||
* | *''We reserve the right to ...'' - Wait a minute: Did you just give that right away? If so, you can't reserve it. If you didn't, you've still got it, so - you know - ''shut up already''. | ||
*", whether ... or otherwise," - kill it. Go on, just kill it. You'll feel so much better. | *", whether ... or otherwise," - kill it. Go on, just kill it. You'll feel so much better. | ||
*''We may, but shall not be obligated to, ...'': collapses quite happily down to "we may ...". And while we're on the subject, "obligated" is only a word if you're a prolix American. The English verb is "oblige" and it means "must". | *''We may, but shall not be obligated to, ...'': collapses quite happily down to "we may ...". And while we're on the subject, "obligated" is only a word if you're a prolix American. The English verb is "oblige" and it means "must". | ||
*''Please be advised/please be aware, please note'': If your intended audience is reading and has the intellectual capacity to comprehend your prose, you may be assured it is being advised, becoming aware, and taking note. If it is not, it won't make a damn of difference. | *''Please be advised/please be aware, please note'': If your intended audience is reading and has the intellectual capacity to comprehend your prose, you may be assured it is being advised, becoming aware, and taking note. If it is not, it won't make a damn of difference. | ||
*''The parties agree that...'': A curiously redundant thing to write, it being an agreement and everything. Try something novel - ''don't say it''. | *''The parties agree that...'': A curiously redundant thing to write, it being an agreement and everything. Try something novel - ''don't say it''. | ||